New Song... need input

ok... so here is a new Nate Storvik original, but before I play it for people other than my roommate, who has to suffer through the baby stages of new songs, I want your input. should I add anything? etc...

Here is the background story
First verse: you get a story of a guy who is heavily involved in his church, church members look up to him, etc. He has been hiding a certain sin for a long time. its mostly meant to be ambiguous here as to specifics. This leaves it open to an individuals interpretation. it is obvious a serious sin in the churches eyes. when I started writing the song I was modeling it after a guy who had been hiding a homosexual lifestyle.

Second verse: This story is a little less ambiguous as you can tell. perfect church girl, has sex, gets pregnant, doesn't know where to turn because she knows the church would be judgemental. I thought about throwing in a line that hinted about her getting an abortion to hid it from the church's judgemental eyes, but i couldn't seem to get it to fit. So that part is left up to your interpretation as to whether she does or not.

also looking for a title

Here is the song

He was reading his Bible on that old black chair

Looking back on his life, wondering how he got there

To the church he attended, he was a jewel

He was the leader of the whole Sunday school

Since he was in high school he was spending his days

Living two lives, going two different ways

He knew that God would forgive him

But in the eyes of his church, forgiveness was slim

Chorus:

We are a church that needs grace more than anybody

We close the doors to the sinful, but what are we?

We’re meant to be a light, and love everybody

Jesus ate with the sinners, why don’t we?

She was just 16; she grew up in the church

She opened her Bible, but didn’t know where to search

She knew all the answers in that Sunday school chair

Since she was five, she could say the Lord’s prayer

Her perfect boyfriend wasn’t all she had dreamed

One innocent evening was more than it seemed

She was so scared and knew the church would just glare

Her stomach grew larger, people started to stare